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So now the end has come.
Much sooner than I expected.
What I had mistaken for love,
Fooled me like a clever magician.
You seemed so genuine to me at times.
Visions of soul mates intertwined in my mind.
My heart never felt such emotions before.
I guess that’s why I felt so content and secure.

You showed me how it feels to love.
I let you inside to see the real me.
There are so many cherished moments I will always adore.
There are so many goals I’ll never get to achieve.

I tried to keep you interested, baby,
Because I knew you’d get bored fast.
I guess I was hoping you would realize,
What’s really important in life,
And what makes relationships last.

But alas, things turned for the worst.
And I sensed our doom was near.
The responses from you were so cold.
They made my stomach tremble and my eyes tear.
Soon there was talk of a new friend,
Whose interests I knew you held dear.
I knew I was losing you, sweetheart.
I was experiencing one of my worst fears.

A knife pierced through my heart,
When you told me she was of interest to you.
Blood still drips from the wounds to this day,
Because I felt helpless.
There wasn’t anything I could do.

So now I am feeling used.
I know I probably shouldn’t.
But some of the things you say,
Aren’t making any sense.
Your reasons for abandonment,
Aren’t completely fitting.

I know I’ll learn from this experience.
Reflection is just a stage in this game.
I’ll just think twice the next time I’m drawn to someone,
Who clearly won’t appreciate,
The warm and gentle soul I am.
©2004-2010 ~FISHNBIRD
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:icondead-kitten:
wow, you wrote it beautifully, its so full of emotion and sadness. great job!

but very sorry it happened :hug:
:iconmanicmonday:
:applause: wow thats some soul digging poem,i could feel your pain,you portray your emotions really well in your poetry excellent job. :wow:

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:iconjudin:
Your poems don't need structure.
I love to read your creations; they contain so much truth! Simple, clear truth.


I would like to point at two things though:

"But, alas, things turned for the worst" (Alas? Does anyone apart from Legolas and Robert use that word?)
"And I sensed our doom was near." (Doom? Sounds a bit...Lord of the rings again. I mean...doom?)


Get well now! :hug:

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:blackrose:Welcome, Sir, please come right this way. My apologies for the screams. Oh, silly me, I forgot! Shall I hang up your straightjacket?:blackrose:
:iconfishnbird:
Oh dear Judin, I guess I am a strange case then, because I often say alas when telling a story. :giggle: And doom is probably a dramatic word to use, but that's what I was going for..after all, I'm just a dramatic gal at heart! :faint: ha ha
:iconfishnbird:
thanks..you are sweet. :hug:
:iconmanicmonday:
No probs! :smooch:

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(¯`v´¯)
.`·.¸.·´
¸.·´¸.·´¨) ¸.·*¨)
(¸.·´ (¸.·´ .·´ ¸¸.·¨¯`·.
Only two letters in my alphabet u and i, it's all we need

visit openrose prints at [link]
:iconjudin:
Me too. I hardly ever write a story without tonns of drama.

I say "Aye" all the time and my friend ( ) keeps complaining about it. :giggle:

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:blackrose:Welcome, Sir, please come right this way. My apologies for the screams. Oh, silly me, I forgot! Shall I hang up your straightjacket?:blackrose:

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